ext_391411: There is a god sitting here with wet fingers. (cleavage)
campylobacter ([identity profile] campylobacter.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] campylobacter 2011-05-09 05:20 am (UTC)

I read slowly enough to subvocalize -- especially Vala's dialog; I'm in LOVE with Claudia's voice. It also gives me time to notice motif, symbolism, alliteration, extended metaphor, and pacing.

I prefer the Show vs. Tell style of writing; instead of TELLING readers that Daniel's instinct is to talk/study/analyze to resolve a conflict or situation, and that Vala's is to take action, SHOWING them is more fun:

DANIEL: (restraining Vala's pickaxe) Wait! No, no, no, no, no! You can't do that! I told you, this is a piece of technology. You could damage it.
VALA: It's been buried for millions of years, Daniel.

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